Alien stat check please?

[vortexman]

Flavour text available on request..However does this work from a mathematical standpoint?

Deep in the far reaches of space you will find the Vetrall depending on who you ask they range from large batlike creatures to ancient birdlike creatures however one thing is always the same when the Vetrall come nobody is safe.For the Vetrall cannot be reasoned with or bribed they are creatures of instinct.Following the lights of ships to their destinations and feasting on the population.A lone Vetrall is bad enough however Vetrall are known to emit a hideous call which alerts all the nearby Vetrall of the food.Planets "colonised" by the Vetrall become breeding grounds for more Vetrall making their elimination almost impossible.

(I'm not fond of the name and the flavour text sounds odd to me)







Attributes:
Awareness 4
Coordination 4
Ingenuity 2
Presence 3
Resolve 3
Strength 4

Traits 4
Alien
Alien appearance(major)
Flight(Major)
Natural weapons (Minor)
Fear Factor

Skills
Athletics 4
Fighting 4
Survival 3
Subterfuge 4

Story Points:

[misterharry]

What is it - some sort of bird creature? Stats look OK to me. The only thing I'd say is that the claws (or whatever the natural weapon actually is) are probably quite nasty, with a good chance to hit (4's on both Coordination and Fighting) and damage of 4 Strength plus 2. If they're an aggressive species, I wouldn't want to meet a gang of them!

Any chance of posting the description text?

[vortexman]

I'll find my notes and edit the original post.The PC's are only likely to encounter the one but they're certainly not to be taken lightly.

[misterharry]

One suggestion having read your scenario outline for this creature: I wonder whether giving it a level or two of Fear Factor would work better than Screamer? I think Screamer is primarily intended to be a defensive trait (e.g. a companion screams on seeing a monster), whereas Fear Factor would give the creature an active ability to cause fear with its shriek. Just a thought.

[vortexman]

So I should replace screamer with fear factor then? Admittedly I only gave it screamer for thematic reasons.Fear factor sounds good.Thanks